tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3228141345371445517.post2160463185010816559..comments2013-08-07T10:47:43.529-06:00Comments on Thoughts in Baritone: Vaelina's ResolveBrilliant Baritonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08530786841888961228noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3228141345371445517.post-57202696747771369672013-01-16T02:17:03.911-07:002013-01-16T02:17:03.911-07:00Thanks Variable Star! I agree that the scene with ...Thanks Variable Star! I agree that the scene with Death in uneccesary and originally it wasn't in there but I added him when I fixed the ending. Thing is, I decided to do these short stories in a larger world during this and I am exploring it as I write. Alandrast for example, is a city and country I created when I started writing a novel (that wasn't good enough so I shelved for a while). I'm planning to explore Death's character and role in the world further in an upcoming short story/scene. When I get around to it of course. If you liked this one, I have one other one on here called Vaelina Watched and you may enjoy it as well. Thanks again!Brilliant Baritonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08530786841888961228noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3228141345371445517.post-81300748973255967592013-01-15T18:42:50.175-07:002013-01-15T18:42:50.175-07:00I love this, especially the twist at the end. Howe...I love this, especially the twist at the end. However, though it adds an interesting color to the end, I think you should have woven Death as a character throughout your story. It's not exactly necessary and distracts from the main story a bit. <br /><br />But it is a lovely story. And by lovely I mean well written. I don't think that spousal abuse and infanticide are lovely, I promise. Variable Starhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11896915587456958733noreply@blogger.com